Writing Week 8

 Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to create an info graphic in one of the first four sustainable development goals. Here is my info graphic.

 

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Week 7 Writing

Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to fill in a self assessment rubric on our speech. Here is the first part of my self assessment rubric.

Evidence

Talking about shocking you’ll be shocked to hear that because of the Covid pandemic 71 million people will be pushed into extreme poverty.

Area for improvement

I think that my hard hitting statistics paragraph could have been longer but it still had the information that it needed.

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Speech writing

 Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my favourite paragraph in my speech. My favourite paragraph is my introduction. My speech was on one of the first four sustainable development goals. The goal I chose was No Poverty. Here it is.

We are facing the biggest problem the human race has ever faced… Poverty. If we leave this for too long there will be a serge in how many people in poverty from 736 million to at least 1 billion. The united nations zero poverty scheme is that they want to end all poverty everywhere by 2030. If we don’t meet this goal the global death rate will be shocking. Talking about shocking you’ll be shocked to hear that because of the Covid pandemic 71 million people will be pushed into extreme poverty. Some people are so rich that they can just throw away money and others are scavenging for food because they can’t afford food. We can stop the cycle of poverty by donating money to UNICEF and other charities to help slow the cycle of Poverty. All I can say is how would you feel if you were living on $1.90 a day?

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Writing Week 3

 Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my persuasive writing for week 3. The task was to come up with some rhetorical questions and some hard hitting facts about one of the top four sustainable development goals. The goal I chose was No Poverty. Here is my task.

Enrolment in primary education in developing countries has reached 91 per cent but 57 million children remain out of school

103 million youth worldwide lack basic literacy skills, and more than 60 per cent of them are women

One in four of the world’s children suffer stunted growth. In developing countries the proportion can rise to one in three.

17,000 fewer children die each day than in 1990, but more than six million children still die before their fifth birthday each year

How would you feel if your child was going to school hungry?

How would you feel if you suddenly became homeless and then no one cared for you?

How would you feel if your home town was taken over and you had to leave to another country and no one cared for you? 

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Reading Week 2

 Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my reading task for week 2. The task was to use the set of slides the teachers had provided and answer some of the questions and show if a piece of text was positive or negative intent. Here is one of the slides I answered.

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Week 4 Term 3 Writing

 Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to create a few sentences that we will put in our speech. Here are my sentences.

You’ll be shocked to hear that because of the Covid pandemic 71 million people will be pushed into extreme poverty.

The united nations zero poverty scheme is that they want to end all poverty everywhere by 2030

We are facing the biggest problem the human race has ever faced… Poverty.

If we leave this for to long there will be a serge in how many people in poverty from 736 million to at least 1 billion

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Writing W3 T3

Kia Ora bloggers, this weeks blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to get together some shocking facts and rhetorical questions about poverty. We had to read lots of texts and look through lots of websites. Here is my task.

Rhetorical Questions

How would you feel if your child was going to school hungry?

How would you feel if you suddenly became homeless and then no one cared for you?

How would you feel if your home town was taken over and you had to leave to another country and no one cared for you?

Shocking Facts

One in four of the world’s children suffer stunted growth. In developing countries the proportion can rise to one in three.

17,000 fewer children die each day than in 1990, but more than six million children still die before their fifth birthday each year

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Writing Week 2 Term 3

Kia Ora blogger, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to create another nine sentences about the Hansel and Gretel story. Here are my nine sentences.

Footsteps hit their heart like a stampede of rhinos. The door knob slowly turned with an ear piercing squeal. A towering green figure stared down at the children. Within seconds Hansel was in a cage getting stuffed with food. Every Millisecond, Every Nanosecond, Every Femtosecond she fed him: Crunchy Carrots, Cheesy Chips and Melting Marshmallows. Over the weeks Hansel became Thicker and Thicker. Meanwhile Gretel has been looking for something to break the cage to let Hansel out. As she walks through the forest she spots something, a red pool, a blood bath, she looks closely and spots her father's special freckle. Gretel picks a nailed piece of wood and runs back to the house where Hansel is held captive, she peers through the window and finds Hansel lying dead on the floor with the Witch sharpening a massive knife, Gretel smashes down the door and smacks the Witch in the head, the nail penetrating the microscopic brain.

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Writing Week 1 Term 3

Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to create part of the Hansel and Gretel story in 9 sentences. Here are my 9 sentences.

The sticks crunching under their feet were picking away at Gretel’s temper. “Look there is a house over there!” Yells Gretel. They both run over to the house. They stood outside of the house and looked at it up and down, the roof creaking in the wind.  The door stood half open luring the kids closer to the house. They stood at the bottom of the staircase leading to the house. “We must go back to father” Says Hansel in a shaky voice. Gretel grabs Hansel’s hand and pulls him into the house.

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Report on Brendon Mccullum

Kia Ora Bloggers, this blog will be about my report on Brendon Mccullum. Here is my full report.

Brendon Mccullum

Early Life.

On the 27th of September 1981 in Dunedin, Otago, Brendon Mccullum was born to a sporting family, the Mccullum’s. Brendon's love for sport didn’t start with cricket as he played in the 1st XV for King’s High School. Brendon was becoming increasingly competent with his skills that Dan Carter said he had to spend a lot of time on the bench because of Brendon. Stuart, Brendons Father played for the otago cricket team and Nathan, his brother played for NZ with the ODI and T20 Teams.

Career.

Brendon started playing rugby before cricket and then started to become increasingly good at these sports as he played for otago for rugby. He joined the New Zealand cricket team on 17th January 2002. Brendon roles were wicket keeping and batting, he also was a Right arm medium or an Right arm off break bowler. Some career highlights for Brendon are that he is one of the only batsmen to play 100 consecutive tests and on the 18th of February 2014 he scored 300 runs in a test against india. After retiring from international cricket Brendon went on to play for teams like Brisbane heat, Otago, Warwickshire and Middlesex cricket teams.

Life Aside from Sport.

Brendon was married in 2003 to Ellissa Mccullum. Brendon has 2 children that are Riley and Maya Mccullum. Some nicknames Brendon has been given are BBM, Baz and B Mac. Brendon has multiple tattoos like on his arm, chest and ring finger. The tattoo on his arm has roman numerals CXXVI, XLII and CCXXIV which are his ODI and Test Number and a former cricketer. The tattoo on his chest is a silver fern and the one on his ring finger is a tattoo of his ring because he can’t wear it while playing. Brendon’s net worth is $6 Million. Now Brendon is an Ambassador for the Maia Health Foundation. Brendon said on the Maia website “I know that if it was my son or daughter in hospital, I’d want to know I’d done all I could to make that time as comfortable as it could be. Christchurch Hospital takes great care of kids from around the South Island. Māia is recognising that through its enhancement project for the Children’s Wards, one of the first projects they are undertaking – and they are asking for your help”.

Conclusion.

In conclusion I think Brendon Mccullum is a great New Zealander because of him helping with healthcare, and sticking to his goals. I personally look up to him because of his approach to problems in the community and he is a leader to follow, I also look up to him because of his look at his sport where he can always play a positive game and helping others. 

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My Revised Sentences

Kia Ora bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The task was to use the template provided to show you revising some sentences from your narrative. Here are a few of my sentences.

1. Original: The growling German powered V8 sputters into life in the frosty cold morning.

Revised: The German Powered Twin turbo V8 Sputters into life shooting condensation into the car behind them. 

2. Original: Jake sits oddly on the warm leather seats, Jacinda is waiting in the beehive for Jake to tell him about how they need his help again.

Revised: Jake sits on his hip uncomfortably on the warm leather seats. Jacinda is waiting in the Beehive nervously about to tell Jake that the secret service need him again.

3. Original:  As Jake gets out of the car he is met by towering security guards in black and white suits.

Revised: Jake get out of the posh lowered Mercedes and sees security guards towering over him.

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Narrative

Hi guys, this blog will be about my Writing task for week 8. The task was to create a Narrative story. Here is the introduction to my Narrative. 

The growling German powered V8 sputters into life in the frosty cold morning. Jake sits oddly on the warm leather seats, Jacinda is waiting in the beehive for Jake to tell him about how they need his help again. As Jake gets out of the car he is met by towering security guards in black and white suits.

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Show not Tell

Kia Ora Bloggers, this blog will be about my writing task for this week. The Goal for this weeks writing is. Use “show not tell” when appropriate. The task was to create a DLO that holds... At least 2 sentences that you have remade, an old sentence from your narrative and then that sentence redrafted using Show not Tell. Here is my DLO. 

 

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