Finished Narrative on the Future

Hi guys this blog will be about my finished narrative writing. Before I show you my writing I'll tell you about how I feel and what I think I can improve on. I think that my piece of writing is to my full potential and I think I could work on my use of words. As i'm not going to put my whole story here i'll just put my opening paragraph. Here it is... 

It’s been over 40 years since 2019 and a lot has changed since then... “Crackle..Crackle...The last survivors who are on this sad and dead world please come to Poland and there is a shelter in Warsaw for you. Please come as soon as possible because there are extreme amounts of radiation in countries like Germany, Russia, India and America. Come as soon as possible”. Crackle...Crackle. “Did you hear that guys! We can go back home to Poland”! Says Jake. “ Do we take the risk or say in our own bunker”? Says Ben. “Come on Ben, we either stay here and die of starvation or go to a bunker with food, water and shelter”!  Says Jake. “Fine we'll go if you think”. Says Ben. “Ben Starts staring at Jake”. “ Why are you staring at me like that”. “Aren’t you gonna start packing”? Says Jake. “Oh”. Says Ben. “ OK it’s time to go”. Says Jake. “Three, Two, One Here we go”. Yells Ben. “Wow… This place is crazy, come on, we need to go to that old plane graveyard in wellington, come on we need to get a move on”. Says Jake. “Where on the road again, can’t wait to be back home again, can’t wait to see my friends”. Sing’s Ben. “Will you cut it out”! Yells Jake. “Look we have arrived”.

Thanks for coming to my blog and have you made a story about future?